This is so beautiful. I've been repeating the word nessness to myself all week. (Also happen to be writing a story about the loch ness monster aka nessie, so that's fun). I like what you said about the final sentence, not having a period, is endless, and was struck by the lack of periods throughout.
Just curious, what do you make of the two periods near the end? Is there something about those sentences that needs an "ending"? "I need it to live and breathe, to go on // to leave. How do you know you know, // you know? I have no more room // to lay down in this life."
sorry for my late response! but i think...in a poem about so much uncertainty, the two shorter sentences at the end (in a poem without periods at all, really) show the few things the speaker is certain about...their needs, and their exhaustion, maybe.
This is so beautiful. I've been repeating the word nessness to myself all week. (Also happen to be writing a story about the loch ness monster aka nessie, so that's fun). I like what you said about the final sentence, not having a period, is endless, and was struck by the lack of periods throughout.
Just curious, what do you make of the two periods near the end? Is there something about those sentences that needs an "ending"? "I need it to live and breathe, to go on // to leave. How do you know you know, // you know? I have no more room // to lay down in this life."
sorry for my late response! but i think...in a poem about so much uncertainty, the two shorter sentences at the end (in a poem without periods at all, really) show the few things the speaker is certain about...their needs, and their exhaustion, maybe.
thank you!! really great point
As always, thank you.
Thank you for this. Much needed.
thank you!